The other night, my husband and I went out to eat at one of our local favorites, a family oriented sports bar. (We don’t really care that it’s a sports bar–it’s close by and happens to have pretty good food and we can almost always grab a booth, even on a really busy night, because they know us there.) As soon as we sat down, though, the waiter warned us that it was “Trivia Night.” We’d somehow managed to miss this phenomenon last spring semester, so we weren’t quite sure what to expect. There was the typical out-going party-hearty Young Guy (backwards baseball cap) who joked with the crowd as they were giving everyone a chance to go sign up for the game, and there was a constant mention of various drinks they had at the bar that was on special for the night. But they handed me comedy gold with the next thing…
It seems they decided to give out a free shot of Jägermeister to a “much deserving” young woman whose birthday was that day. She was finally 21 and after three years of getting kicked out of the bar for drinking underage…
We just have to stop right there for a moment. Three years. Three? She is a college student, who kept going to the same bar, a place which knew her by name, and tried to drink illegally, even after they’d thrown her out before? Three years? At this point, I am expecting someone to walk up with the IQ of a garden hose. I am worried that she drives. Or votes.
…and now that she’s 21, they are going to give her a free shot. Because seriously, that’s what we want to do here, we want to take the person with the least common sense in the room and compromise the two brain cells that are still operating.
So they call her name and as soon as she walks past us, I realize why the cute young stud who was in charge wanted to give her the free shot. I happened to look at her face, which was sweet and demure and she looked as if she could be teaching Sunday School. I’m pretty sure not a single man in the place managed to glance all the way up to her face: this is a girl whose boobs were so large, they had their own gravitational pull, and there is going to come a day when she realizes that gravity is not her friend. I probably should have stopped her and thanked her for choosing “clothing” as one of her options for the evening, though we might need to discuss whether or not something see-through that is tied around things the size of Jupiter qualifies as actual clothing. I was quite impressed, however, with the symmetry of the tattoo around her left nipple. Good steady hand for that. My compliments to the artist.
Seeing her there reminded me of two different motorcyclists, probably a couple of months apart. The first was a super bad ass Harley dude. We were stopped at a red light and he pulled up even with me. Typical tats, worn biker boots, leather jacket, beard that implied that he hadn’t shaved or bathed in months. Truly, a gritty looking guy. And as the cars in front of him inched up a little, he inched up, too, and I saw something pink and red out of the corner of my eye, so I looked back at him…
And he was wearing a backpack made of red fur. RED FUR. With pink tassels. RED FUR, PINK TASSELS, people.
Last week, I was alone about three cars behind a motorcyclist who was stopped at a red light. He was in the left lane, I was in the right or I’d have never seen him. He was a relatively small guy on a big Harley, dressed in typical biker gear, though I have to confess, I didn’t look that closely. What I saw, instead, was that he had glued big plastic spikes to his helmet. Imagine the Statue of Liberty kind of pointy spikes with a wider base, pyramid-style, but arranged like a mohawk. These things were big ass spikes, too–at least ten inches, all the way from the front of the helmet to the back. Ten. Inch. Spikes. The spikes were bigger than he was. I desperately wanted to pull alongside and tell him that it’s called “overcompensation.”
Comedy is everywhere.
A couple of weeks ago, I talked (here) about how to utilize humor in your writing, and to set the stage for the actual methods, we talked a little bit about the goal and purpose of humor: to illuminate character, show the irony of the situation and to set up for something else more humorous down the line.
There are a ton of reasons why you may want to utilize humor, even if what you’re writing is a very dark story. (Unrelenting darkness can overwhelm the reader and cause them to put down the book for a respite; humor, however, can provide that respite and keep the reader reading.)
Comedy writing–the actual words on the page–depend on rhythm, pacing, style of language, imagery. Like music–staccato rhythm = fast song. Comedy has a rhythm. The set up to the joke has to pace just right, and you have to know when to stop.
But first, you need to know where to start.
There are a lot of different methods that can be used for comedy. Very few people are truly without humor–even your darkest protagonists. Even your darkest villains. You have to simply find the right kind of method to illustrate their particular kind of humor. (And when you do, it’ll add a layer to that character, a way for you to show us an element about him or her that will illustrate what matters to them, as well as their world view.)
In Bobbie Faye’s second book (Girls Just Wanna Have Guns), the opening sentence is:
Bobbie Faye Sumrall was full up on crazy, thank you very much, and had a side order of cranky to spare.
That sets the tone for the book — we know this is going to be a whacked out crazy book — and it uses exaggeration as a technique. If there’s any doubt, this paragraph follows soon after:
Bobbie Faye and the Universe were like warring spouses locked in an eternal battle, trying to blow each other up rather than admit that the other was savvier. (The Universe, by the way? A big fat cheater.)
I purposefully chose hyperbole as a voice for Bobbie Faye because I knew when I first started writing the series that there were going to be elements of the fantastical — exaggerated action scenes, huge set pieces, crazy, physics-defying moments. Those things would have floundered if Bobbie Faye herself used normal language and never resorted to exaggeration.
Here’s a short list of mechanisms I use for humor. (This isn’t an exhaustive list.)
Incongruity — if what the character gets is different than what they expect. In MEN IN BLACK, when Jay (Will Smith) is going to get the super-terrific laser from Kay (Tommy Lee Jones), he’s expecting to be handed the biggest baddest alien killing gun in the arsenal. And Kay hands him something the size of a tiny water pistol.
Rule of Three — three examples are generally a great rhythm, but you have to make sure they appear in order of least-to-best, smallest-to-largest. In other words, if you have three examples, you don’t want the best example first because the other two will then suffer by comparison and the schtick won’t be as funny. Rule of three can be seen as something spread out over the course of the story… with the third either being an exaggeration or a reversal from the other two, causing the reader to be caught by surprise. That third example generally illustrates some hidden truth.
Here’s an example of a Rule of Three in action. It’s from GALAXY QUEST (one of my favorite comedies of all time). Sir Alexander Dane is played by Alan Rickman as a classically trained “important” actor who got stuck playing this popular character on a cheesy sci/fi (a la Star Trek) TV show. Fred Kwan was once the “cute precocious kid” who “flew the ship” and is now grown up and Jason Nesmith is played by Tim Allen.
Sir Alexander Dane: I played Richard III.
Fred Kwan: Five curtain calls…
Sir Alexander Dane: There were five curtain calls. I was an actor once, damn it. Now look at me. Look at me! I won’t go out there and say that stupid line one more time.
then a minute or so later…
Jason Nesmith: Am I too late for Alexander’s panic attack?
[Alex hides his face in despair]
Jason Nesmith: Apparently not.
then a beat later, when Sir Alexander Dane won’t go on stage:
Jason Nesmith: You WILL go out there.
Sir Alexander Dane: I won’t and nothing you say will make me.
Jason Nesmith: The show must go on.
Sir Alexander Dane: …Damn you.
Truth — telling the fundamental truth in the moment that most people won’t admit out loud. (An example of this is in PRETTY WOMAN, when Julia Robert’s character is at the polo match, and the two snooty women point out to her that she’s just the girlfriend du jour, that everyone’s after Richard Gere’s character for his money. She says, “Really? Well I’m just here for the sex.”)
Lies — the audience has to be in on the lie and how that lie is a twist in the moment. In MEN IN BLACK, when Will Smith and Tommy Lee Jones are discussing the “flashy thing” that can erase a person’s memory, they have this exchange:
Jay: Did you ever flashy-thing me?
Kay: No.
Jay: I ain’t playing with you, K. Did you ever flashy-thing me?
Kay: No.
Situation — physical comedy that stems directly from the situation itself, and usually illustrates a truth. Using PRETTY WOMAN again, that moment in the restaurant when Julia is trying to figure out how to eat the escargot, and she has no idea, but she doesn’t want to embarrass Richard by asking. She does her best to follow the lead of the men around her, and still, as soon as she does what they’re doing successfully, the snail shoots across the room and a waiter catches it. “Slippery little sucker,” she says, covering, and they all agree. Situational comedy can run from the slapstick (Jim Carrey in many of his movies… for example, in LIAR LIAR, when he cannot tell a lie for 24 hours due to his son’s birthday wish, one of the scenes demonstrating it is him walking out of an elevator where everyone is making a horrible face, holding their nose and when he’s out, he turns around and brags, “It was meeeeee.”) But situational comedy can run all the way to the sublime, the subtle moments. I loved the humor in the moment in SENSE AND SENSIBILITIES when Edward Ferrars (Hugh Grant) shows up in London to visit Miss Dashwood (Emma Thompson) and has already gotten all of the way into the room before he realizes that the woman to whom he is engaged (but has not seen in a very long time), is also present. It is awkward and funny and a little heart-breaking at the same time.
Reversal of Expectations — The name says it all–the character expects one thing but gets something else entirely. In LITTLE MISS SUNSHINE (a movie built on reversal of expectations), the entire family has traveled across several states in order to take the daughter to a beauty pageant that none of them really believe in, but they’re doing it to be supportive of her. They have no clue about the beauty pageant culture, and the movie is really about them coming to terms with certain truths about themselves and each other and finding a way to be a family. Once the competition has begun (and this is a SPOILER if you haven’t seen the movie), the daughter has to perform her talent for that portion of the contest. Her grandfather (who has died along the way on the trip) had been teaching her the dance, and she’s very very proud of what she’s learned. It hasn’t occurred to the mother or the dad to check to see what kind of dance the grandfather taught her…
And so, when the music starts, it’s SUPERFREAK and Olivia (who is 7) start performing an outrageous strip-tease/pole dance/slutty girl grind that is so horrifyingly cringe-worthy, and so hysterical. The other mothers are hiding their girls’ eyes and the woman in charge is very snottily trying to stop the dance and evict Olivia from the contest. But her dad runs up on stage and starts dancing and soon enough, the whole family is up there, and it’s terrible and funny at the same time. But the moment of the reversal of expectations–when that girl rips off her “tear-away” pants (I think she has gym shorts on underneath) and tosses them out to the crowd? Utterly brilliant comedy.
Okay, I’m going to stop here for this week–I have a bunch more for next week, which will be the last comedy week. I’ll have a bunch more examples of comedy mechanisms (like the above) and we’ll talk about tone (wry, black humor, ironic, dry, hyperbolic) and literary means (analogies, similes, metaphors, etc.).
For now, how about a fun game: tell me an example of humor. Any example, any movie, book or BLOG. Anywhere. And I’ll see if I can name the mechanism at work. [I'll be checking in about lunch time.] I’ll also be really curious if anyone can name a funny moment in a darker film (any genre). And just to make this fun, all commenters are eligible for a $15 Amazon or B&N gift certificate. So getcher examples cracking!


















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I’m mostly lurking and enjoying these posts. I don’t think I could ever write “funny” although sometimes my characters make me laugh. I have (I think) a sense of humor, but I couldn’t convey it through an entire book. I think your posts explain why – it takes a LOT of work, planning, and setup. I have enough trouble keeping track of all my mystery clues and red herrings.
Hubby goes for the in-your-face slapstick, but I prefer more subtle inuendo. I think there’s also humor in the ‘inside joke’ — like the scene in the Indiana Jones movie where Indy reaches for his whip, but it’s not there, so he just shoots the guy. If you hadn’t seen the setup in the other movie, it wouldn’t have been funny.
Or in Mr. Baseball, where Tom Selleck is confronted with a platter of sushi and decides that the little mound of green stuff is the safest way to begin. Sushi wasn’t so popular when that movie first came out, and you could tell who in the audience was ‘in’ on the setup by the pre-reaction gasps.
Terry, you’re definitely right about the set up. Comedy can’t get in the way of the story and should, if it’s done well, help set up everything else (character, conflict, motive, goals). And that takes a lot of synthesizing, if it’s going to be done for an entire story. I love that Mr. Baseball scene–definitely incongruity at work!
Is it fair to name something non-fiction? Quinn Cummings’ book NOTES FROM THE UNDERWIRE and her blog, The QC Report. (You have to go a few months back to find the best entries, as since July 7 it’s been mostly book blog touring and trying to promote the book.)
Her writing is incredibly funny – but sometimes makes you want to cry at the same time.
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Thank you for this great informative post!
I’ve cut & pasted it to go with Part I
I’m attempting to follow your advice & examples with some rough writing because you mentioned that writing comedy can be learned. (I’m trying).
An example of a book which always makes me laugh out loud is UNDEAD AND UNWED by MaryJanice Davidson.
It begins:
The day I died started out bad and got worse in a hurry.
I hit my snooze alarm a few too many times and was late for work. Who wouldn’t hit the snooze to get another nine minutes of sleep? No one, that’s who. Subsequently, I almost always oversleep. Stupid snooze button.
See? Awesomeness.
Betsy is full of humor throughout the novel.
Thanks again,
Love & Best Wishes
@RKCharron
xoxo
Love MJD. She is funny and she does so much with her comedy. And RK, you rock–thanks for the compliments. I’m so glad if this helps anyone at all.
Awesome, Toni! I know I could never write humor the way you do! It is a God-given talent, honeychild!
LOL… ya know, Deb, I remember when I set out to learn how to be funny. (I was in junior high — I was short–under 5′, scrawny skinny, big glasses, no boobs… humor seemed about the only thing I *could* learn to do something to not be a complete wallflower. I watched a lot of comedians, read humor, dissected it, and started practicing. Of course, I was probably already a natural smartass (I thought that was my middle name for a loooonnnggg time), but the dissecting really helped!
What a great blog, Toni. Thanks for laying it all out.
I have an example of Reversal of Expectations, one of the funniest scenes of all time, in the first Indiana Jones movie. When Indy is at the souk and is confronted with a big dude confidently wielding a long, curved sword, swishing it back and forth menacingly. Indy looks at him with disgust, draws his gun, and shoots him.
Karen, I love that example. And it wasn’t planned in the script. Indy was supposed to have that big battle and Harrison Ford was very sick that day with the flu and just couldn’t physically do it. So he came up with the suggestion of the reversal of expectations and everyone loved it and it has since become iconic!
Y’all, this woman is just as funny in person as she is on paper. Seriously. Don’t ever pick up a glass to take a drink when she’s talking. I meant it!
As for humor, everyone needs to read this blog. Just sayin’. http://dooce.com/2009/08/28/containing-capital-letter-or-two
I totally heart dooce. She is my kind of crazy.
My favorite funny scene EVER in a book!
She watched him walk away. He had just pushed the door open and stepped outside when she went running after him.
“That’s it.”
She caught up with him outside, standing in the moonlight. She poked him between his shoulder blades and said it again, much louder this time. “That’s it. You win.”
He turned around. “Excuse me?”
She was so angry she poked him in the chest. “I said you win.”
“Okay,” he said calmly. “What did I win?”
“You know what I’m talking about, but since we’re alone, why don’t I spell it out? This game we’ve been playing. You win.
I honestly thought I was holding my own, but obviously I was wrong. I’m just not good at it. Okay? So you win.”
“What exactly do I win?”
“Sex.”
He raised an eyebrow. “What?”
“You heard me. We’re going to have sex, Theo Buchanan. Oops, I mean we’re going to have great sex. Got that?”
A devilish smile crossed Theo’s face, and then he seemed to stare off into space. Was he already thinking about making love,
or couldn’t he pay attention long enough to listen to her concede?
“Michelle, honey—”
“You’re not paying attention, are you? I want to have sex with you. The bad kind,” she qualified. “You know what I’m talking about. The hot, steamy, tear-our-clothes-off, mind-blowing, scream-out-loud sex. Like in the old song ‘All Night Long,’ that’s
you and me, babe. All night long. You name the time and the place, and I’m there.”
She’d apparently rendered him speechless. That had to be a first. Maybe she wasn’t so bad at this stuff after all. Theo just
stared at her with that lopsided grin in place. She suddenly felt as cocky as a rooster getting ready to crow.
She folded her arms across her waist and demanded, “So? What have you got to say to that?”
He took a step toward her. “Michelle, I’d like you to meet an old friend of mine, Noah Clayborne. Noah, this is Michelle Renard.”
He was bluffing. He had to be bluffing. She gave a tiny shake of her head. He nodded. She shook her head again, whispered, “Oh, God,” and closed her eyes. This couldn’t be happening.
She didn’t want to turn around. She wanted to vanish into thin air. How long had he been standing there? Her face began to
burn. She swallowed, then forced herself to turn.
He was there, all right. Tall, blond, amazing blue eyes, and a killer smile.
“It’s nice to meet you,” she stammered. Her voice sounded like she had laryngitis.
Until she’d turned, she hadn’t thought it could get any worse. She was wrong about that. Her father was standing in the
doorway, just a few feet away from Noah, and he was definitely close enough to have overheard what she’d said to Theo.
Maybe he hadn’t heard, though. Maybe he’d just gotten there. She gathered her courage and glanced at him. Daddy looked thunderstruck.
Michelle came up with a quick game plan. She would simply pretend it hadn’t happened.
“Did you just get here?” she asked nonchalantly.
“Uh-huh,” Noah drawled. “So, Theo, are all the pretty ladies in Bowen this friendly?”
The door slammed shut behind her father as he rushed forward. Now he appeared mortified. “When I said ‘put out the
welcome mat,’ I thought you understood what I meant. There’s friendly and then there’s real friendly, and I raised you to
know the difference.”
I can’t think of a funny scene in a darker movie right now, but I think some stuff in Saw in funny! You should’ve asked dark movies or tv shows.I could think of a lot.
OH, LOL!! That is total mortification (which is on the list for next week)… but I will be pointing everyone back to this example!
Too funny, thank you for the laugh!
I can do sarcasm *a little* with some of my characters, but that’s about the limit of my humor. I can do self-deprecating humor when I speak in public, but not ha ha ha humor.
One of my favorite comedy scenes is at the beginning of the third act of FRENCH KISS when Kevin Kline (Luc) agrees to help Meg Ryan (Kate) get her ex-boyfriend Timothy Hutton (Charlie) back after he left her for a French Goddess. Kate sees Charlie having brunch at the resort with the “goddess” and her parents. She has to get closer so hides behind potted plants, then a dessert cart, and I forget exactly how it happens, but she eventually overturns the cart and is a mess, but Charlie doesn’t quite see her . . .
Then when she meets Charlie on the beach and pretends not to care that he broke up with her. The conversation is priceless.
I love that movie
Humor in dark movies . . . THE MATRIX has lots of subtle humor. With the oracle tells Neo not to worry about the vase, and then he moves and knocks it to the floor and breaks it. Or when he meets Trinity for the first time in the club and realizes that he knows about her online and says, “I thought you were a guy” and she says, “Most guys do.” Priceless.
THE DEPARTED has a lot of dark humor, particularly with Jack Nicholson’s character and Matt Damon’s character are together. When Damon kills Nicholson, for example, then tells the cops that the killer ran that way. (I haven’t seen the movie in awhile, but the look on Damon’s face was priceless.) The end of the movie with the rat and how Damon dies … and the music had an almost humorous beat.
Star Wars uses comic relief in tense scenes. It’s subtle, like Princess Leia saying about Chewy, “Will someone get this walking carpet out of my way?”
Hmm, the end of CASABLANCA seems to be a reversal of expectations, right teacher?
There’s a lot in Indiana Jones movies as well, they could have been a lot darker than they were. #3 I think had the most natural humor, I loved Sean Connery and Harrison Ford together in that movie. When they learned that they both slept with the Nazi chick was priceless. The dangerous scene where Indy almost died off the cliff and is barely hanging on and Connery is distraught, but when he sees him climbing up, he says something like, “Don’t hang around all day, we have work to do” and leaves him hanging there.
I swear, WE ARE TWINS. I love that movie. I have watched it probably a dozen times. Of course, KEVEN KLINE. The man could read a phone book and I’d love it.
Utterly fantastic examples, too, Allison. (You are a *lot* funnier than you realize, I think.)
Grief – the first thing that comes to mind is Blade trinity … any one of Ryan Reynolds lines would work but lets go with this cause it’s the first one I could find:
Ryan: we call ourselves the Night Stalkers
Blade: sounds like rejects from a Saturday morning cartoon
Ryan: we were gonna go with the Care Bears but uh, that was taken
Or how about the fact that he goes into battle with a bullseye taped to his chest ? The movie is fulll of funny one liners and such. I Love humor in dark movies/books
ban — those are hysterical! Great reversals in the dialog and reversal of audience expectation with the bullseye! Love these, thank you!
There’s some great humor in the Lord of the Rings movies to balance out some of the more dreadful events. Most of it is accomplished through the clownish antics of the other two hobbits: Merry and Pippin, who are always looking for an angle. When Isengard is torn down by the Ents, they hang out, ostensibly as guards, and eat their way through the larder. I guess the humor there is that everyone else is so tough, adn the hobbits are so irrepressible.
The other big source of humor is the ongoing kill-count contest between the dwarf and the elf. Even in the midst of battle, they are snarking at each other about who has killed more. At one point, there’s a long sequence where the elf jumps on the back of this massive elephant, cuts the bonds holding its war machine platform on its back (killing all the soldiers on it) then shoots it in the head. It falls on more soldiers in a massive pile of dust, shaking the earth as the elf lightly surfs down its tail and lands on his feet.
The audience is going, “wow.” The dwarf’s response? “that only counts as one.”
*snort*… Oh, Diana, so glad you’re here–that’s one of my favorites. I love the long long build up for that joke, but it was so worth it, visually.
Thanks for stopping by!
Toni–I love Bobbie Faye; thanks for creating her for the rest of us who aren’t nearly so clever. Thanks also for the great column.
I am a fan of humor in unexpected situations. J. A. Konrath’s latest Jacqueline “Jack” Daniels mystery, “Cherry Bomb,” is about our heroine’s seach for a brutal, sadistic killer. But there are laugh-out-loud moments throughout the book, chiefly around her divorced parents and a sleazy former partner’s new pet monkey.
There are so many comedic gems in the film “Casablanca.” I love the scene where Rick explains to Capt. Renault why he came to Casablanca. “…I came for the waters.” “The waters? But we’re in the middle of a dessert.” “I was misinformed.”
Thank you, GSM! So glad you enjoyed Bobbie Faye.
And I had completely forgotten that line in Casablanca–perfect dry delivery, too. Love it.
The first movie scene that came to mind was from MASH. There were a lot of moments in that film, but the scene when everyone sets up their chairs near the shower tent. When Hot Lips goes in and starts to shower, the tent side goes up to reveal her. MASH is really a sadly dark movie. The humor in it is a desperate attempt by the characters to maintain their sanity.
Patricia, I loved M*A*S*H. Loved it. The movie and then later, the TV show. (I think I caught every re-run of that show for years.) Great example. Definitely (for Hot Lips POV), a combination of Reversal of Expectations, Situation and Humiliation. (Which is the usual combination of a Practical Joke.)
This is my favourite ‘funny moment, in a darker film’:
A long time ago, I went to see Schindler’s List with a Drancy escapee (she’d fucked a camp doctor and he had smuggled her out).
Part way through the film, she leaned over to me and said:
“Do you think they’ll build a ‘Schindler’s List Ride’ at Universal Studios? With cattle trucks?”
So, there I was, watching Schindler’s List with a concentration camp survivor.
Laughing.
Define the mechanism.
SJ, in the moment, that was a Reversal of Expectations. You were expecting something somber from this woman, given the horrors she experienced and the subject matter playing up on screen. She nailed you.
Oh, and I meant to add that was freaking hysterical of her to do that. (Black humor)
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