Comments on: Loglines http://www.murdershewrites.com/2007/08/23/loglines/ Ten Authors. Five Genres. One Blog. Because the only thing scarier than a loaded gun pointed at your head....is writing about it. Thu, 29 Jul 2010 23:50:40 +0000 hourly 1 http://wordpress.org/?v=3.0 By: spyscribbler http://www.murdershewrites.com/2007/08/23/loglines/#comment-119541 spyscribbler Fri, 24 Aug 2007 03:42:22 +0000 http://www.murdershewrites.com/?p=539#comment-119541 Oh, right. I told myself to practice, LOL. Does this lead you anywhere? KILLING FEAR A freed murderer is on a bloody rampage of revenge for his imprisonment. Can Detective Will Hooper put an end to the killing spree, before he becomes the next victim? SILENT SCREAM Is the cold-blooded murder of a murderer an act of heroism? When a widow is stalked by a dangerous hero, she fears the man who killed the murderer of her husband and son. DYING BREATH A convicted murderer must prove his innocence to his daughter--the witness who singlehandedly landed him on death row--before the real killer strikes again. Oh, right. I told myself to practice, LOL. Does this lead you anywhere?

KILLING FEAR
A freed murderer is on a bloody rampage of revenge for his imprisonment. Can Detective Will Hooper put an end to the killing spree, before he becomes the next victim?

SILENT SCREAM
Is the cold-blooded murder of a murderer an act of heroism? When a widow is stalked by a dangerous hero, she fears the man who killed the murderer of her husband and son.

DYING BREATH
A convicted murderer must prove his innocence to his daughter–the witness who singlehandedly landed him on death row–before the real killer strikes again.

]]> By: spyscribbler http://www.murdershewrites.com/2007/08/23/loglines/#comment-119532 spyscribbler Fri, 24 Aug 2007 03:18:26 +0000 http://www.murdershewrites.com/?p=539#comment-119532 I hope you had fun at Six Flags! I definitely like the second FEAR NO EVIL logline best. Shorter is definitely better and stronger. I wanted to play, but my brain just won't come up with something this late. Oh heck, truth is, loglines are SO hard for me! I think I need to start practicing them with other people's books, first. I hope you had fun at Six Flags! I definitely like the second FEAR NO EVIL logline best. Shorter is definitely better and stronger.

I wanted to play, but my brain just won’t come up with something this late. Oh heck, truth is, loglines are SO hard for me! I think I need to start practicing them with other people’s books, first.

]]> By: Kendra http://www.murdershewrites.com/2007/08/23/loglines/#comment-119521 Kendra Fri, 24 Aug 2007 01:33:31 +0000 http://www.murdershewrites.com/?p=539#comment-119521 The sole eyewitness who testified to imprison a serial killer a decade ago discovers the original prosecution team is being murdered one by one. Terrified for her safety, Forensic specialist Lacey Campbell must figure out who the new killer is before he finds her. Outcast Max Cage returns to his small hometown to find his murdered father's grave dug up and containing the wrong remains. Max fights against three decades of prejudice and secrets to find out what actually happened to his father. Ack. I should have timed how long this took me. Waaay too long. When does the Killer Year anthology come out? I've been on a Lee Child kick for the last week, rereading all his books in order. The sole eyewitness who testified to imprison a serial killer a decade ago discovers the original prosecution team is being murdered one by one. Terrified for her safety, Forensic specialist Lacey Campbell must figure out who the new killer is before he finds her.

Outcast Max Cage returns to his small hometown to find his murdered father’s grave dug up and containing the wrong remains. Max fights against three decades of prejudice and secrets to find out what actually happened to his father.

Ack. I should have timed how long this took me. Waaay too long.

When does the Killer Year anthology come out? I’ve been on a Lee Child kick for the last week, rereading all his books in order.

]]> By: Jen Apodaca http://www.murdershewrites.com/2007/08/23/loglines/#comment-119488 Jen Apodaca Thu, 23 Aug 2007 20:16:52 +0000 http://www.murdershewrites.com/?p=539#comment-119488 For the first time, I started with a log line on my current project, but alas, I can't share. Dang. These are fun to read though! For the first time, I started with a log line on my current project, but alas, I can’t share. Dang. These are fun to read though!

]]> By: Kellie http://www.murdershewrites.com/2007/08/23/loglines/#comment-119484 Kellie Thu, 23 Aug 2007 19:43:34 +0000 http://www.murdershewrites.com/?p=539#comment-119484 Hi Allison, Here's my attempt at capturing my current wip, Cursed Blessings, in a logline: Investigative reporter Scott Murphy is taking a look at sperm donation through different eyes - those of the offspring thirty years later - but when each of his interviewees turn up dead, teaming with Homicide Detective Lucy Gallagher is his only hope to prove he's not the killer. I really appreciate the article you shared and any feedback you might be willing to give. Loglines are right up there with high concept pitches as things that get me tongue tied. Hi Allison,

Here’s my attempt at capturing my current wip, Cursed Blessings, in a logline:

Investigative reporter Scott Murphy is taking a look at sperm donation through different eyes – those of the offspring thirty years later – but when each of his interviewees turn up dead, teaming with Homicide Detective Lucy Gallagher is his only hope to prove he’s not the killer.

I really appreciate the article you shared and any feedback you might be willing to give. Loglines are right up there with high concept pitches as things that get me tongue tied.

]]> By: Edie http://www.murdershewrites.com/2007/08/23/loglines/#comment-119466 Edie Thu, 23 Aug 2007 16:13:01 +0000 http://www.murdershewrites.com/?p=539#comment-119466 Allison, looking at the logline for DYING BREATH, I realize you can use a different noun as well as adjective instead of "innocent man". The reader will know he's a man when she reads he was convicted of killing his wife and her lover. I'd forgotten the lover in the one I'd written. Allison, looking at the logline for DYING BREATH, I realize you can use a different noun as well as adjective instead of “innocent man”. The reader will know he’s a man when she reads he was convicted of killing his wife and her lover. I’d forgotten the lover in the one I’d written.

]]> By: Allison http://www.murdershewrites.com/2007/08/23/loglines/#comment-119463 Allison Thu, 23 Aug 2007 15:59:35 +0000 http://www.murdershewrites.com/?p=539#comment-119463 Hi, BE, much better than mine! I can work with that. Thanks :) Hi, BE, much better than mine! I can work with that. Thanks :)

]]> By: B.E. Sanderson http://www.murdershewrites.com/2007/08/23/loglines/#comment-119456 B.E. Sanderson Thu, 23 Aug 2007 14:56:26 +0000 http://www.murdershewrites.com/?p=539#comment-119456 Thanks, Allison. Now I just need to finish this latest round of tweaks and get someone to represent/publish it. =oD Try this for Killing Fear: <i>Every convicted psycho promises revenge, but when one escapes and begins carrying out his promise, it's up to the man who put him behind bars to stop the killing spree before becoming its next victim. </i> (Or something like that. I just threw this together.) Thanks, Allison. Now I just need to finish this latest round of tweaks and get someone to represent/publish it. =oD

Try this for Killing Fear: Every convicted psycho promises revenge, but when one escapes and begins carrying out his promise, it’s up to the man who put him behind bars to stop the killing spree before becoming its next victim. (Or something like that. I just threw this together.)

]]> By: Allison http://www.murdershewrites.com/2007/08/23/loglines/#comment-119453 Allison Thu, 23 Aug 2007 14:29:44 +0000 http://www.murdershewrites.com/?p=539#comment-119453 Hi B.E.: I love your title and the logline! It says everything you need. I wouldn't change it either. Hi Edie: I remember that idea! Great line. I like your rewrite of DYING as well. Shorter and tighter. Thanks! Hi B.E.: I love your title and the logline! It says everything you need. I wouldn’t change it either.

Hi Edie: I remember that idea! Great line. I like your rewrite of DYING as well. Shorter and tighter. Thanks!

]]> By: Edie http://www.murdershewrites.com/2007/08/23/loglines/#comment-119450 Edie Thu, 23 Aug 2007 13:53:58 +0000 http://www.murdershewrites.com/?p=539#comment-119450 Here's mine for Dead People (formerly Dead People are Easy): <i>When a brooding songwriter with a newly found daughter discovers his house is haunted, who's he gonna call? A ghost whisperer who thinks men are hard and DEAD PEOPLE are easy.</i> How's this for DYING BREATH? <i>An innocent man convicted of killing his wife escapes death row and struggles against the clock to gain his estranged daughter's trust before the real killer strikes again.</i> Although I used "innocent", a different adjective would work better. We know he's innocent by the "real killer". Here’s mine for Dead People (formerly Dead People are Easy):

When a brooding songwriter with a newly found daughter discovers his house is haunted, who’s he gonna call? A ghost whisperer who thinks men are hard and DEAD PEOPLE are easy.

How’s this for DYING BREATH?

An innocent man convicted of killing his wife escapes death row and struggles against the clock to gain his estranged daughter’s trust before the real killer strikes again.

Although I used “innocent”, a different adjective would work better. We know he’s innocent by the “real killer”.

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